returning to a place you though you knew but nothing is the same as you remember. but it's not the place you thought you knew but the occupants are people you swear you've seen. his blue eyes and the way they crinkle when you say something that is terribly antiquated. wait, where was i? the guy's eyes crinkle just like a man you knew on Earth but he's got more crinkles than he did 50 years ago when he last saw you blast into the sky on TV. your space ship was already going too fast to be stopped, and their experiments with the previous 2 old spaceships / ancient* spaceships -- the occupants died upon forced reanimation -- convinced them to let your journey take its course.
*because when your technology moves faster than the speed of light (by 15x by the last report, 20x if the legends are true) a second is all that separates a solid gold obelisk from a crumbling temple.
[ i am not sure how i held onto the thread of that idea with such a long, parrenthetial tangent...but I'm a bit impressed.]
this woman awakens in an unfamiliar element, something visceral like a tub of gelly (jelly, perhaps?) or maybe she is rebirthed, having been revived in a synthetic uterus. not sure about that science but it's gross and appropriate so even if it isn't organic like a uterus it has the same imagery. anyhow, she comes out of this chamber and air rushes into her lungs and this is from the POV of the doctors/surgeons? and he is having this internal dialogue about some big statement / theme of the story. Not too important what this is yet. I can tweak it later.
From this scene, we go to this woman with wet hair and a towel wrapped around her . or maybe not, I'm not sure with all this technology that she would be a slave to her body, shivering from the cold. i guess fear or emotion can make psychosomatic symptoms appear so this could be something like this. "You continue to shuddrer despite having received all of these meds to fix that." I'm not sure b/c in the future you would think that their psychology would have also improved. Like maybe they an pinpoint what's wrong with your head/heart without you needing to struggle through it.
And that lack of struggle perhaps softens the world. I'm not sure what the future world will be like. It will have to be familiar enough to have common ground with the reader but it also needs to be strange enough to be a different time.
I suppose at this point I'm going to pull up the snowflake method because I'm warmed up and should be working with more structure so I can turn this into more than just a single promising scene.
***
Now this I need to see.
*because when your technology moves faster than the speed of light (by 15x by the last report, 20x if the legends are true) a second is all that separates a solid gold obelisk from a crumbling temple.
[ i am not sure how i held onto the thread of that idea with such a long, parrenthetial tangent...but I'm a bit impressed.]
this woman awakens in an unfamiliar element, something visceral like a tub of gelly (jelly, perhaps?) or maybe she is rebirthed, having been revived in a synthetic uterus. not sure about that science but it's gross and appropriate so even if it isn't organic like a uterus it has the same imagery. anyhow, she comes out of this chamber and air rushes into her lungs and this is from the POV of the doctors/surgeons? and he is having this internal dialogue about some big statement / theme of the story. Not too important what this is yet. I can tweak it later.
From this scene, we go to this woman with wet hair and a towel wrapped around her . or maybe not, I'm not sure with all this technology that she would be a slave to her body, shivering from the cold. i guess fear or emotion can make psychosomatic symptoms appear so this could be something like this. "You continue to shuddrer despite having received all of these meds to fix that." I'm not sure b/c in the future you would think that their psychology would have also improved. Like maybe they an pinpoint what's wrong with your head/heart without you needing to struggle through it.
And that lack of struggle perhaps softens the world. I'm not sure what the future world will be like. It will have to be familiar enough to have common ground with the reader but it also needs to be strange enough to be a different time.
I suppose at this point I'm going to pull up the snowflake method because I'm warmed up and should be working with more structure so I can turn this into more than just a single promising scene.
***
Now this I need to see.
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